Okay, I'm not even gonna TRY to be nice.
First off, you try to put it under the name "ParagonX9", therefore squandering a very legendary artist who has been putting music here before you even did. ParagonX9 is WAY beyond your skill level. In fact, in terms of skill, you've officially created and are now on a whole new level of fail. Congratulations. Second, this song is just terrible. Not only that, but on low volume it hurts my ears to listen to it.
Seriously, I am very disappointed. You are not ParagonX9, and you never will be. ParagonX9 is a legendary Newgrounds icon here, and she's a mistress of music. You, sir, are just a mere fly that needs to be swatted.